morning commute: stream of consciousness

For the dVerse Monday quadrille prompt “stream“:

Dirt and ‘roos -> gravel -> tarmac, one lane -> two lanes -> white lines -> more lanes, highway barricades.
Trees -> fields -> farms -> villages -> outskirts -> suburbs -> cement-grey city towers.
Farm utes -> dusty wagons -> soccer-mums’ four-wheel drives -> city-cars – shiny bubbles of banality on wheels…
all of us joining the stream


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31 responses to “morning commute: stream of consciousness

  1. Super presentation 🎊

  2. Love your take on the prompt. Very well done!

  3. Yes. Like tributaries. Does it make you feel conformist? LOL I just hate being “one of the crowd” especially if it involves waiting in traffic or for a toilet. 😀

  4. Yeah, tributaries was exactly what I had in mind. 🙂 I hate waiting in toilet lines too – that is the one downside to the increasing number of women in my workplace. 😀

  5. One of my favorite ways to write … stream of consciousness!!!! Yours is amazing!

  6. Oh this one whizzes by too quickly; I had to go back twice to slow the stream, let it ALL sink in. Great stuff! Thanks.

  7. Beverly Crawford

    Your “stream” allowed us to accompany you on the journey!

  8. Love the flow of this, giving the feeling of traffic. I do have to say, I might KILL to see a ‘roo on a morning commute! 😉

    • When my daughter was about 2 I had to explain to her that they’re just called “kangaroos”. Not “f_ing kangaroos”. 😀 I do like them, but I have hit a couple, and had many, many near misses, and one I slowed right down almost to a stop for and then it jumped into the side of my car and smashed a mirror!

  9. sanaarizvi

    Oooh this is absolutely splendid!! I really love the flow of this one 💝💝

  10. Very interesting. Enjoyed it.

  11. We’re all in there somewhere. I liked the experimental format. It looks almost like a formula or equation.

  12. I like what you did here!

  13. What’s ‘roos and ute?

    • A ‘roo is a kangaroo (top picture), and a ute (utility vehicle) is like what Americans call a pick-up truck, but smaller, and built on a car chassis rather than a truck chassis. They’re used by farmers, tradespeople and sensible people who need to move things around, while pick-ups are used by people who like to use a lot of petrol for no good reason while running their engine to power their air-conditioning while sitting in the school car park, destroying the atmosphere for their kids… ummm… yeah… . See for a less biased explanation.

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