My twins are doing poetry in English at the moment, and they have to put together an anthology of their own poems, as well as analysing some poems.ย This is a ha’sonnet Twin 1 (T1) wrote about our neighbour’s llamas, Devil (black) and Ghost (white), shown here lurking by moonlight:
Two llamas lurk
one dark, one light,
but both berserk,
gave mum a fright.
With stick-man legs
and big tall heads,
they make me laugh.
Awesome! My parents have alpacas and they’re inclined to lurking too. And I love the description “stick man legs”. It’s so right for these unusual animals.
Thank you ๐ They’re such big animals, yet so stealthy – I never know they’re there until I turn around to find them right behind me.
T1 has just run to tell T2 that he has likes and a comment already. ๐ But he has to go to bed now.
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humps
jumped
water
water
everywheres!
Oh, very good! Tell him it made me laugh. ๐ฆ๐ He did a great job capturing the scene. Iโm also amused this is the form heโs using for school. I hope it goes over well with his teacher. ๐
Thanks Stephen. I thought a modern English/American (?) form would give good variety. He may have to explain the form to his teacher. ๐ And he was pleased that he got a like and a comment from the master of ha’sonnets ๐
I did enjoy it and did laugh out loud. Stick man legs. ๐ I hope the teacher accepts it. It is actually an Australian/American creation. Grant Hayes, one of the two creators, is Australian. The other, Michael Lester (MHenry), is American. I havenโt heard from Grant nor seen any writing from him in a long time. He was a Commended mention for the 2015 W. B. Yeats Poetry Prize for Australia INC poetry award , but they took down the link to his poem (not a haโsonnet). It used to be linked on my site, but now I link to the few poems he left in the RhymeZone forum. Michael Lester focuses on haiku/senryu/tanka poetry on Twitter now.
Thanks for that extra information! Very helpful for the analysis he has to include. ๐
Youโre welcome. Good luck to him. ๐